*Hi, you may know me as Jessa Russp. LOL! *shakes head*
THE WRITER'S VOICE contest is being hosted by the fabulous Cupid, Monica, Brenda, and Krista! Thank you so much ladies!!! *Follow along on Twitter by using hash tag #TheWritersVoice
EVER
YA Paranormal Romance
Word Count: 87,100
PLOT SUMMARY:
THE WRITER'S VOICE contest is being hosted by the fabulous Cupid, Monica, Brenda, and Krista! Thank you so much ladies!!! *Follow along on Twitter by using hash tag #TheWritersVoice
EVER
YA Paranormal Romance
Word Count: 87,100
PLOT SUMMARY:
Ever
Van Ruysdael has a choice: continue pining for the ghost of her dead best
friend, Frankie, whom she’s secretly loved as long as she can remember, or move
on to her sexy new neighbor, Toby – who unbeknownst to Ever, is a soul collector.
Make the wrong choice, and she’ll learn that more than just her heart is on the
line.
Seventeen-year-old
Ever’s love life has been in purgatory for the past two years. Since the
car accident that took Frankie’s life, but spared hers, she’s had to wake up
every day to his ghost, making it impossible to mourn him or move
forward. That all changes when Toby moves in next door. Easy to fall for, Toby’s relaxed confidence
and honest interest in her makes Ever feel like the only person in the
world. Torn between an exciting new relationship with Toby, or the
deep, comfortable love she feels for Frankie, Ever must make a decision.
As
Ever falls harder for Toby, Toby gets closer to Frankie. Soon, she will
learn that the price of her new romance isn't just her heart, but Frankie’s
soul.
I've lived next door to Frankie my entire life. We played together when we were little. He pulled my pigtails. I tattled, he teased.
He's the best friend I've ever had.
I've been in love with him as long as I can remember. That’s my secret.
He's been dead for two years.
Today is the second anniversary of his death. It's been exactly seven hundred and thirty days since the car accident that took his life, and didn't take mine. Seven hundred and thirty days since the only guy I've ever loved died in my arms, followed me home from the hospital, and never left my house again.
I'm in love with a ghost who has absolutely no idea I feel this way, and worse - probably still sees me like an annoying kid sister. No. Big. Deal.
I mean, sure, it took some getting used to, but eventually I had to accept the fact that he's here for good. There's no mourning him, and there's no moving on with my life.
Two years. Two years since my life as a normal teenager went right out the window. Two years since Frankie became nearly invisible.
Looking at him now, leaning up against the antique roll top desk my mom insists is proper living-room décor, he’s beautiful, even in death.
I watched him die, you know. I held onto him as the last breath left his body. I cried and screamed, but no one came in time. No one heard me.
great entry, jessa. good luck with the contest!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Valerie! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteWooHoo! Love it! You're SO gonna get snagged!
ReplyDeleteI friggin hope so! Did you decide not to enter? :-(
DeleteOMG! You got in?! *dances*
ReplyDelete*dances with you* ... but not in a weird way. Ahem, hubs. lol
DeleteI love this opening! So heartbreaking and intriguing! Good luck with the contest!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jamie! Good luck to you too!
DeleteVery powerful opening. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Nicole! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteThank you, Adam! Good luck to you too!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds awesome - really like the voice!
ReplyDeleteThe... (wait for it)... WRITER'S VOICE?
DeleteLOL Adam! ;-)
DeleteThank you Xan!
Ooo, sounds intriguing! Good luck to you!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteGood luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteGreat story idea! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteDang! That excerpt is gutting! Nice work! Good luck with the contest - see you on Twitter. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!!! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteHey Jessa...from one contestant to the next...good luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteGood luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteDropping by to say "Good Luck!" and this line grabbed me: Seven hundred and thirty days since the only guy I've ever loved died in my arms, followed me home from the hospital, and never left my house again.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jennie! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteI had to click through and see who snagged the number one Mr. linky spot :) Sounds like an interesting premise! Best of luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteGreat job! I'll call you speedy fingers from now on! I'll try to sneak in tonight! Good luck! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Laura!
DeletePopping in to say good luck. I like your premise. I also really love the way you've set up your blog. Must follow.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! Its nice to hear you like my blog - you never know how it looks to other people, you know? Good luck in the contest!
DeleteAwesome query - talk about high stakes! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck to you too!
Deletewow. awesome story .
ReplyDeleteThank you, Alice! Good luck in the contest!
DeleteGreat opening lines! I love the last paragraph especially! I joined your blog and look forward to reading more. Good luck in the contest!
ReplyDeleteWow! This was great to read!
ReplyDeleteInteresting story -- good luck!
ReplyDeleteIntriguing premise! I wish there was a little bit more about the soul collector bit in your query. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Cherie!
DeleteIts been really hard for me to figure out what to put in the query. Toby being a soul collector is a very climactic part of the story, so I thought I should leave it out. Then I thought I should keep it, so agents will see why the stakes are high and why Frankie's soul is in danger. I'm still totally confused about what to say and what not to say in a query (and I despise queries because of this), but for this contest, its in there. ;-)
Ghost stories are classic. Loving the romance!
ReplyDeleteLove the last line of your query. Good luck.
ReplyDeleteWow! Scored first position! Fast fingers!
ReplyDeleteThis is such fun! Good luck
Oh, snap! Yay for getting in, and yay for your awesome entry! Best of luck.
ReplyDeleteFinally getting the chance to pop over and take a look at your entry! I'm not normally much of a paranormal reader, but this one is really intriguing! Really loved the line that starts, "Seven hundred days..." -- way to pack an emotional punch! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteI love me a good ghost romance story. This is intriguing -- I love the humor scattered throughout. Good luck in the contest!
ReplyDeleteCongratulations on making the list, and best of luck with your fantastic entry! ^_^
ReplyDeleteWow, I love the idea of letting go of one love, only to find that the new love is not what you think it is. I'm very interested to see where this story could lead. There's a great deal of drama that can be built on this premise.
ReplyDeleteOnce again, good luck!
Good luck!
ReplyDeleteStopping by as one Writer's Voice contestant to another to say good luck!
ReplyDeleteooh, I like this concept, and I don't normally read paranormal. good luck :)
ReplyDeleteSounds like something I'd have on my shelf! Good Luck! #199
ReplyDeleteLoved the conflict between the three main characters, very interesting situation you've put them in. Try bringing that out more right off the top, as it'll hook your audience right it!
ReplyDeleteGood luck!
John
Awesome. Wishing you well in the competition.
ReplyDeleteAwesome. Wishing you well in the competition.
ReplyDeleteI don't usually read paranormal, but I love your premise. Looks interesting.
ReplyDeleteGood luck!! (And as a side note I *love* the name Ever!)
ReplyDelete#40 in Writer's Voice
Sounds very cool. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteAlex (Entry #85)
Sounds interesting. The query alone makes me want to read it. & I understand how the p replaced the o with fast fingers flying. Congrats on snagging the #1 spot & good luck!!
ReplyDeleteEntry #31
Thank you! Congratulations on getting picked!!!
DeleteOooo soul collector!! Interesting. Good luck ;o)
ReplyDeleteThank you Erica! Good luck to you too!
DeleteSounds interesting! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteNikki (Entry #160)
Thanks Nikki! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteOoh, love the query!! Good luck!!
ReplyDeleteThank you! That sucker took me for a spin, beat me till I was bloody, and then laughed at me. I'm pretty happy that I finally got it to submit. ;-)
DeleteHi Jessa,
ReplyDeleteGreat premise, cute voice, very YA.
Good luck
Jacky (#130)
xxx
Thank you Jacky! Good luck in the contest!
DeleteI love the rhythm of the first page. You really captured my interest! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Laurie!!
DeleteGood luck to you too!
Best of luck! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Monica! To you as well!
DeleteI would so read this. :)
ReplyDelete<3 #162
I would SO read yours as well! So good!!! You'll get in for sure!
DeleteFirst, I have to tell you that your WIP list makes me tired - no exhausted. Wow.
ReplyDeleteI really got the teenage voice in your first page. An interesting concept. I'd like to see more.
Good luck!
Thank you!
ReplyDelete*My WIP list is nothing compared to my unfinished ideas list, saved in random documents in random files on my computer. LOL! ;-)
Just popped by to wish you good luck. Love the story premise and your opening words too.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds fascinating. A soul collector what a cool concept. Good luck in the contest.
ReplyDelete#134
Stopping by to wish you good luck in TWV. :)
ReplyDeletePassing through to say good luck!
ReplyDeleteOkay, I'm so new to this blogging business, I just figured out I could 'click' on a contestant's name and read their entry. I never thought I was a fan of romance, but I loved this query--touching and spooky.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the others - Ever is a gorgeous name. :D Good luck!
ReplyDeleteI can't believe you were #number 1 - - GOOD LUCK!! I am loving this entry...
ReplyDeletecheck me out if you get a chance #165
- Random Andrews
"Seven hundred and thirty days since the only guy I've ever loved died in my arms, followed me home from the hospital, and never left my house again." After that line I was definitely in. Good luck.
ReplyDeleteNow I'm curious to know how he died.
ReplyDeleteBest of luck!
Carolyn, #157.
wow, what a way to start this contest. You sure did set the bar high with this! Great job and good luck- from a new follower who didn't make it past Mr. Linky, but will be rooting from the sidelines :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful thing to say, Amber! Thank you so much!
DeleteGood luck in the contest~!
ReplyDeleteClara #112
i'm a sucker for ghost/love stories! your writing is lovely. best of luck to you! jessica (#111)
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